A glance at the provided pie charts reveal how many hours are spent in the library by undergraduates and postgraduates compared to all students at university of Britain.

A glance at the provided pie charts reveal how many hours are spent in the library by undergraduates and postgraduates compared to all students at university of Britain.
A glance at the provided pie charts
reveal
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how many
hours
are spent in the library by undergraduates and postgraduates compared to all
students
at
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the university
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university
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University
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of Britain.
Overall
, undergraduates who are reading books spend less pattern than both postgraduates and other
students
. It can be clearly seen that just under two-thirds
undergraduate
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level
students
spend at most seven
hours
per week than the average proteges.
Therefore
, the figures were 63% and seventeen
percent
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respectively.
Moreover
, a tiny minority of freshmen spend more than fifteen
hours
,
whereas
bachelor
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bachelor's
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, master's and
PhD
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Ph.D.
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students
in
this
category are just above 50 percent. Meanwhile, the time spent in
library
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the library
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for
further
students
appear
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differently.
Subsequently
, most spend
till
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apply
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14
hours
per week (85%), but from
this
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exactly
one half
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of the
students
spend at least one hour in a British library, which is approximately three times more than the corresponding figure for postgraduates at university.
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