Persentage of water used for diffrent puroeses in six areas of the world

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pie chart, We can able to illustrate the
persentage
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percentage
of H2O in six areas of the world.
Overall
, The majority of the
water
is used for
agriculture
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usage
, The
country
which is leading in
agriculture
consumtion
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consumption
is Africa, South East
Asia
and
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finally
South
America
. The
least
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usage
is by domestic use in which the
persentage
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percentage
is not
exceding
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exceeding
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15% .
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Furthermore
industrial
usage
of
water
is high in two
country
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that
are
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North
America
and Europe. First of all,
Agriculture
usage
is high in four
country
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countries
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and low in two
country
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, Central
Asia
has the highest
usage
which is 88 % of
water
and the least is Europe, which contains 32% of
water
for cultivation. In between of
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both there are four countries that are Africa, South East
Asia
, South
America
and North
america
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,
there
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persentages are 84%,81%,71%,39%.
Inaddition
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,
The
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domestic use very
less
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little
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water
comparatively to industrial
usage
and
agriculture
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agricultural
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usage
.
domestic
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Domestic
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usage
of
water
is comes
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within 7 to 15
persentage
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per cent
. Industrial
manufacture
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is large in North
America
and Europe. So, those two countries use large
amount
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amounts
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of
water
. Other countries
that
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are South
America
,South
America
, South East
Asia
and
Aferica
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Africa
are the least
water
usage
in industries.
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