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Persentage of water used for diffrent puroeses in six areas of the world

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percentage
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, The majority of the
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 is used for
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agriculture
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 which is leading in
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consumtion
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consumption
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Asia
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finally
 South
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 is by domestic use in which the
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percentage
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 15% .
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Furthermore
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 of
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 is high in two
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country
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 that
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 North
America
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 and Europe. First of all,
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usage
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country
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and low in two
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, Central
Asia
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 has the highest
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 which is 88 % of
water
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 and the least is Europe, which contains 32% of
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 for cultivation. In between of
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 both there are four countries that are Africa, South East
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, South
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 and North
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america
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,
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 persentages are 84%,81%,71%,39%.
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,
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domestic use very
less
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water
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 comparatively to industrial
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agriculture
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.
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 of
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is comes
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 within 7 to 15
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per cent
. Industrial
manufacture
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 is large in North
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 and Europe. So, those two countries use large
amount
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 of
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are South
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 ,South
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, South East
Asia
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 and
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Africa
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usage
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 in industries.
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