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The chart below shows the different types of accommodations chosen by the British when they were on holidays in 2013.

The chart below shows the different types of accommodations chosen by the British when they were on holidays in 2013.
#accommodations #british #holidays
The displays chart describes
about
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the different types of accommodations chosen by the British when they were on holiday in 2013. There are 4 types of housing facilities
as well as
 in the 4
states
. The information is on accommodation chosen by the British in 2010 for
hoilday
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holiday
. The information is in % in the given chart. In
the
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England, the highest was in
hotel
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hotels
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. Self-catering is more than 20%. In
the
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Scotland, Caravan is nearly 10%. In
the
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Wales, camping is
also
near by
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 15%. In
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Northern Ireland, self-catering
ans
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and
 camping are equal. The highest caravan is in Northern Ireland.
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Scotland
have
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 more self-catering
compare
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 to other
states
. Northern Ireland is
quit
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quite
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 different
compare
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 to others. The
wales
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is
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quit
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quite
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smiliar
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similar
 to
Scotaland
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Scotland
. Self
occurpeted
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occupied
 accommodation is more in
wales
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 than
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in onther
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onther
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other
states
.
To conclude
, the above data is in percentage. The highest in all
states
 is in hotels.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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