Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health poblems. Sugary products should be made more expense to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

I strongly agree that sugary
products
should be made more and more
axpense
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expensive
expense
so that people consume less as much as possible. The below information
describe
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about
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how increasing price can have
good
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a good
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impact on
people
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people's
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health
. Nowadays, so many
product
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products
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cantain
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contain
contains
sugar
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and
an
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chemical which can harm
public
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the public
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. High
level
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levels
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sugar
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of sugar
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dont
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are
not only harmful to the nation but
also
to the
health
of
population
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the population
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.
For example
, NGOs should spread awareness about eating healthy food and drinks. state
shoud
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should
support NGOs. Nowadays, it is
an
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trend among children
for trying
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new
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new drinks by which
there
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they
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are consuming more and more
sugar
.
However
, there is even advantages
about
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as new drinks are coming
in
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market
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the market
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more and more woman are getting work which is good for the country's development.
Thus
,
Government
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the Government
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should support eco-friendly
good
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goods
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as well as
community should
also
support
such
kind
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products
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of products
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. On the other side, To improve
health
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of the nation government can impose high taxes on
product
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products
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which are harmful.
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, increasing
tax
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the tax
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on
sugar
which
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apply
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will have
great
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a great
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impact on
sugar
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the sugar
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industries
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industry
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and
sugar
price
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prices
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will increase by which the public will consume less which will have
great
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a great
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impact on public
health
.
Sugar
is good for
limited
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amount. But if the state
will put
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more and more taxes on
sugar
then
poor people will face
diffectly
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difficulty
in
buy
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buying
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such
kind
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kinds
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products
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of products
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.
To conclude
, the above information
describe
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about
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the
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apply
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how sugary
iteams
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items
are harmful and government can control
on
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it
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them
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. The above data describe
about
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how taxes
plays
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play
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an
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great role
on consume
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in the consumption
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of
products
.
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