In some high schools part of the curriculum requires students to participate in community work such as helping the elderly or disabled. In what way do children get benefits from this? Do you think it should be part of the curriculum?

Nowadays, students are taking
part
in so many
activity
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as well as
in
community
work
which
have
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so many
benefits
which
are describe
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in
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the below
paragrapy
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paragraph
paragraphs
.
According to
me
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it should be
part
of the curriculum. There are so many
benefits
for
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doing
community
work
. As children are in high
schools
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school
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they should take
part
in
community
work
so they can get so many
benefits
like
there
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their
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knowledge increase. By taking
part
in different
activity
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activities
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people get more
an
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and
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more information about different kinds of
thinks
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things
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. If
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a child
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child
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children
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do
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an
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community
work
physical development and national development take place.
Thus
, a school should focus a
student
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students
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to take
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taking
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part
in
work
.
For example
, by helping the elderly or
disables
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disabled
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kids can get blessings from
whose
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their
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groups. Institutions should make rules for children to take
part
in activities.
For instance
, if a
child
Sunday goes
for
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to
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community
work
and
then
plays video games, it can help both
child
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children
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as well as
the
community
. If a kid joins new NGOs or
community
work
he will meet new people from
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whom
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which
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whom
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he can learn new things. So, By new ,
experice
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experience
a person will learn a lot about technology. By joining a
community
person will face
really of
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life. Helping elderly people both
gets
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benefits
a
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old person and
the
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child
.
To conclude
, the
about
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apply
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information describe about
benefits
and advantages which student gets by working in the
community
.
Hence
, every
child
should
be encourage
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be encouraged
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to
work
in the
community
for
it
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its
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development. School should
encouarge
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encourage
to do
work
.
According to
me it should
part
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be part
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of
curriculum
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the curriculum
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • empathy
  • emotional intelligence
  • civic responsibility
  • community awareness
  • lifelong commitment
  • valuable life skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • time management
  • real-world scenarios
  • boosts self-esteem
  • sense of accomplishment
  • expands worldview
  • promotes inclusion
  • diverse groups
  • open-minded
  • culture of tolerance
  • respect
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