In some high schools part of the curriculum requires students to participate in community work such as helping the elderly or disabled. In what way do children get benefits from this? Do you think it should be part of the curriculum?
Nowadays, students are taking
part
in so many activity
Change to a plural noun
activities
as well as
in community
work
which have
so many Change the verb form
has
benefits
which are describe
Change the verb form
are described
in
the below Change preposition
apply
paragrapy
. Correct your spelling
paragraph
paragraphs
According to
me
it should be Add a comma
,me
part
of the curriculum.
There are so many benefits
for
doing Change preposition
to
community
work
. As children are in high schools
they should take Fix the agreement mistake
school
part
in community
work
so they can get so many benefits
like there
knowledge increase. By taking Correct your spelling
their
part
in different activity
people get more Fix the agreement mistake
activities
an
more information about different kinds of Correct your spelling
and
thinks
. If Correct your spelling
things
Correct article usage
a child
child
Fix the agreement mistake
children
do
Change the verb form
does
an
Correct article usage
apply
community
work
physical development and national development take place. Thus
, a school should focus a student
Fix the agreement mistake
students
to take
Change the verb form
taking
part
in work
. For example
, by helping the elderly or disables
kids can get blessings from Wrong verb form
disabled
whose
groups.
Institutions should make rules for children to take Correct pronoun usage
their
part
in activities. For instance
, if a child
Sunday goes for
Change preposition
to
community
work
and then
plays video games, it can help both child
Change to a plural noun
children
as well as
the community
. If a kid joins new NGOs or community
work
he will meet new people from Correct pronoun usage
whom
which
he can learn new things. So, By new ,Correct pronoun usage
whom
experice
a person will learn a lot about technology. By joining a Correct your spelling
experience
community
person will face really of
life. Helping elderly people both Replace the word
a real
gets
Verb problem
apply
benefits
a
old person and Change the article
an
the
Correct article usage
a
child
.
To conclude
, the about
information describe about Correct word choice
apply
benefits
and advantages which student gets by working in the community
. Hence
, every child
should be encourage
to Change the verb form
be encouraged
work
in the community
for it
development. School should Change the pronoun
its
encouarge
to do Correct your spelling
encourage
work
. According to
me it should part
of Add a missing verb
be part
curriculum
.Add an article
the curriculum
Submitted by purvaam383 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+
Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!