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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by government. others believe those who financed the construction of a building should be free to design it as they fit. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 development of infrastructure in urban areas is always a concern of debate. Some groups of people believe that the layout of
building
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a building
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 should be decided by authorities. Others argued that fund supporters
ought
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 be free to build buildings. I believe that both parties should be involved in
such
matter
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. On the one hand, it is common that cities face various problems
due to
 their narrow and unplanned framework
such
 as public congestion , traffic etc. There for a group of individuals ,cities government must involve in building construction process.Having supervision of authorities during
building
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the building
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 design, and manufacturing process leads to more regulations. The ultimate result of
this
 , the framework would be
according to
 its purpose as well
reliable
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 for the public .
On the other hand
 , some people think that the fund provider spends a huge amount on new infrastructure which is considered as a development of the urban area.
Therefore
 , the financed should be free to decide and construct the building as per their requirements.
Apart from
this
 , they spend a large sum of money on architecture. So, a government inference would discourage them from building
such
 infrastructure.
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 result of
this
 , the development of urban areas can suffer a dramatic decrease. In conclusion,
although
 , the
fund
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funds
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 provided should build the building they want,
therefore
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for
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the welfares
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welfares
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welfare
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 of society government must have regulations on
design
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the design
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 of new framework cities are public spaces.
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