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The pie chart below shows the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016.

The pie chart below shows the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016.
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The pie chart represents the number of mouthpieces in various
languages
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 in Canada in 1996,2006 and 2016. Half of the native folk spoke in English over the period.
while
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 the ratio of Urdu is significantly increasing and other
languages
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 remain constant. IN 1980,
overall
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 half of the mouthpiece was speaking English as their native language and compared to other
language
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but
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Urdu and Chinese were slightly spoken by the fellows in Canada comparing other Native
Languages
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. But in 1990, the people commenced to talk in their Native language as Urdu and English slightly decreased by 55% and other
languages
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 remained constant.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • native speakers
  • pie chart
  • number
  • different languages
  • Canada
  • 1996
  • 2006
  • 2016
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • increase
  • decrease
  • majority
  • minority
  • significant
  • notable
  • significant
  • share
  • dominant
  • diverse
  • linguistic landscape
  • shift
  • evolution
  • data
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • graphical representation
  • pattern
  • change
  • fluctuation
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