The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.                                                                                                Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate
how
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what
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graduate
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graduates
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and
the
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apply
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higher degree
students
decide to do after they
came
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come
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out from the UK university in 2008, with
exception
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the exception
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of permanent
work
.
Overall
, it can be seen that the majority of
students
whether graduate or postgraduate,
they
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apply
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want to go
further
study and only
few
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a few
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of them
dedicated
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are dedicated
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to voluntary
work
.
To begin
with the graduate
students
, almost 30,000 people prefer to enrol in
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a master
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master
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master's
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degree, which is the highest value among the remaining categories. Followed by,
the
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The
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figure of individuals who did part-time
work
and
do
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did
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not have any occupation
were
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was
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almost the same at
aroun
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around
17,000,
while
only 3,500 of them
want
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wanted
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to improve
to
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apply
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society
by
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through
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volunteer
work
.
Likewise
, the postgraduate
students
had
lower
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fewer
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people than the previous,
their
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and their
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decition
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decision
decisions
were
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apply
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stayed in the same
raking
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range
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,
although
there was a narrowed gap between part-time
job
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jobs
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and
continue
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continued
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study
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studies
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, with 2,535 and 2,725, respectively. The remaining categories stayed at the same position, but lower than the first ones around 10 times.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate/postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time education
  • voluntary work
  • unemployment
  • travel/gap year
  • percentage/proportion
  • field of study
  • economic factors
  • trends
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • correlate
  • preferences
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