The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of five different energy sources in 1983 compared to 2003.
Overall
, it can be seen that
the
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oil was the main fuel source that
used
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in both years;
this
figure witnessed a slight decline since 1983,
while
the remaining power sources increased steadily in
this
period with the exception
for
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hydropower and coal.
To begin
with 1983,
this
year
just over 40% of power was generated by oil, which was the highest value among the resources. Followed by coal and nuclear energy
that
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were
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the second and
third ranking
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at around 20%. The neutral gas and water combined at only 15%, which were the least
favored
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fuels. In 2003, there
were
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a marginal drop in coal and petroleum to 38% and 13%,
while
nuclear and neutral gas
risen
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rose
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to 24% and 21%
in
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this
year
.
However
, water remained the lowest source in both
year
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years
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and
this
value stayed
the
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at the
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same percentage
at
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as
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the previous
year
at 4%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • energy sources
  • increases
  • decreases
  • trends
  • analysis
  • significant
  • compare
  • changes over time
  • introduction
  • phase out
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