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The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The graph illustrates the number of the
population
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 living in the rural area in some Southeast Asia countries
such
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 as
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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 between 1970 and 2020 and the forecast from 2030 to 2040. As can be seen in the graph given, in 1970 the country
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 the least
number of
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the
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population
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 about 13%
being
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Indonesia
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. In
the
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contrast,
at
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 the same year, the
population
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 in
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 was the highest about 32%. Followed by
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the
population
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idensity
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density
identity
 of
Malaysia
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 and
Thailand
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, at 30% and 19% respectively. In the next year, we have some changes, the highest position changed. The highest figure of the
population
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 at that time
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 by
Malaysia
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, at 40%. The next position was
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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, there was a slight increase
about
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of about
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 33% and there
were
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a
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stability in the number of the
population
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 of
Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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, at 22% and 17%. In 1990,
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had a quick rise in
the
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population
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about
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 47% and
Malaysia
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also
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 had a mild growth
about
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 45%. The percentage of the
population
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 of
all
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Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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 continued to stay constant. In the next years, there was
an
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 fluctuation. From 2000 to 2040, there
were
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 a significant upswing in the
population
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 of
Malaysia
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 and
Indonesia
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 and the quantity of the
population
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 living in cities
some
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in some
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 nations like
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and
Thailand
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 went
ups
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 and
downs
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. The
population
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idensity
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density
identity
 of
Malaysia
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 and
Indonesia
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 was at 60% and 25% in 2000 and up to 80% and 55% in 2040 respectively.
Besides
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 that, the percentage of the
population
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 of
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and
Thailand
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 was at 44% and 27% in 2000 and up to 46% and 41% in 2040.
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, there was an upward trend from 1970 to 2040.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, philippines, malaysia, thailand, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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