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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#aim #science #people #lives
These days, thanks
for
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 modern technology,
people
’s
live
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 can say that it is more
improve
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 than before but
besides
 that, it
also
 has some drawbacks for everyone.
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, it is not certain that science
is really upgrade
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is really upgraded
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 the quality of
people
’s
live
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. Because we are living in the digital age,
so
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everything can become automatic.
People
 don’t need to do anything,
for example
, if before that many
housewifes
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housewives
are
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 very busy and tired because of domestic chores, now we have some
robots
 that can help them clean the house more easily. We
also
 can contact together
although
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 you are far away from your home or your office, you still can talk with your relatives or join a meeting by
your
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phone. Many devices like that make our
live
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 become more
convienient
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convenient
 with many functions that they have. Every individual can research information and absorb more knowledge or perhaps we can work or study everywhere if we want. Sometimes, many benefits that science
bring
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 to
people
 are
disadvantage
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.
Because we
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 have a large number of
robots
 being born with many advantages, but
it
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also
replaces
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 the position of
people
.
Due to
this
, many
people
 become jobless because some positions of companies refuse to hire
people
instead
 of using
robots
 which is the best way for them. Many modern electronic devices have
the
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high
price
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 and not everyone can buy
it
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them
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 to serve their lives. If
people
become
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rely on
this
, our
live
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lives
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 will be controlled by
robots
 and it is
very
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terrible.
Hence
, science
have
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 many contributions to our
live
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lives
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 in building and developing country, but
in
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 the other hand, we need to consider a few sides
whether
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 it is useful for us or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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