The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, thanks

for

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modern technology,

people

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live

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can say that it is more

improve

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than before but

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that, it

also

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has some drawbacks for everyone.

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, it is not certain that science

is really upgrade

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the quality of

people

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live

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. Because we are living in the digital age,

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everything can become automatic.

People

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don’t need to do anything,

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, if before that many

housewifes

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housewives

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very busy and tired because of domestic chores, now we have some

robots

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that can help them clean the house more easily. We

also

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can contact together

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although

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you are far away from your home or your office, you still can talk with your relatives or join a meeting by

your

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phone. Many devices like that make our

live

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become more

convienient

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convenient

with many functions that they have. Every individual can research information and absorb more knowledge or perhaps we can work or study everywhere if we want. Sometimes, many benefits that science

bring

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people

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are

disadvantage

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Because we

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have a large number of

robots

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being born with many advantages, but

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also

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replaces

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the position of

people

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this

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, many

people

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become jobless because some positions of companies refuse to hire

people

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instead

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of using

robots

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which is the best way for them. Many modern electronic devices have

the

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high

price

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and not everyone can buy

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to serve their lives. If

people

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become

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rely on

this

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, our

live

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will be controlled by

robots

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and it is

very

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terrible.

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, science

have

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many contributions to our

live

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in building and developing country, but

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the other hand, we need to consider a few sides

whether

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of whether

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it is useful for us or not.

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Sep 8, 2023

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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284 words

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technological advancements
medical discoveries
life-changing inventions
innovations
solutions to human problems
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improvement of healthcare
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energy sectors
eradication of diseases
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