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The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise it.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise it.
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The pie chart illustrates the difference between a survey of
tourists
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 who visited four types of buildings in Britain in 1999. Most family who visits British
tourists
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 tend to choose
theme
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parks
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 as their destination, which account for about 38% and the number of
tourists
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 who prefers to watch Museums or Galleries roughly equals the number of the topic place. Unlike these popular projects, about 25 per cent of the population choose to vacation in Historic Houses and Monuments or Wildlife
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 and Zoos approximately 16% and 9% respectively. The chart
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 gives details about the precise choices that people who tend to visit
Theme
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parks
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 make. About half of the people go to the Blackpool Pleasure Beach and the gap between other attractions is not so wide( from 10% to 17% ). Generally,most people prefer to visit Museums and Galleries or
Theme
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Parks
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, and the majority of
tourists
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 choosing to observe
Theme
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Parks
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 are going to visit Blackpool Pleasure Beach.
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