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With a growing population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more GM foods. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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In the past people used to eat a
lot
 of organic
foods
, but nowadays time has changed, and humanity has been using more and more
GM
food
.
Overall
, I would say that to keep healthy individuals should use more organic
foods
 rather than Genetically modified
food
 ,
however
 a
lot
 of using letters can lead to serious problems. One strong argument in favour of advantages is the cheap cost of
products
.
This
 kind of
food
 can be easily found in any supermarket or shop. Because
GM
foods
 are made in factories,
furthermore
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there are a
lot
 of
GM
food
 factories in the world.
This
 means that individuals will save their money, and time.
For instance
, the American World statistic of
last
 2022 year showed that genetically modified
food
 costs just over 2 per cent cheaper.
Therefore
 in some ,
aspects
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GM
products
 can win organic
food
. There are several arguments why organic
food
 is better than
GM
food
. people’s
health
. The first factor is human
health
. There might be difficulties with organisms
such
 as heart, stomach, head diseases and so on.
This
 means that human beings who use
GM
products
 a
lot
 will live fewer years.
According to
 the statistics of 2022
year
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 just over 61 per cent of people died because of being overweight and having
health
 problems caused by
GM
products
.
Secondly
, it is a process of growing. When human beings eat a
lot
 of
GM
food
 individual brains will think much worse,
,
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moreover
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 people will grow slowly. Biology research showed that a few centuries ago our ancestors were 10 to 15 times bigger than now,
furthermore
was
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 much more clever. Because everyone at that time could write.
Therefore
 control of eating and use less
GM
foods
 will protect our
health
,
furthermore
 will keep our living years.
To conclude
i
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 would suppose that
GM
food
 can not replace organic
food
. Using more organic
food
 can extend people’s lives, and keep them healthy.
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