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The diagram below shows the process of using water to generate electricity for human use.

The display diagram describes the
process
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 of using water to generate electricity for human
use
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. Overview,
Hydro-electric
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Hydroelectric
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 power generation
have
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has
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long
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a long
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process
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. Sun
lighest
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light
 fall on sea Evaporation take place and rain is
colleted
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collected
 by dam them it
move
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moves
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 to
valve
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the valve
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 open/close to
turbine
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the turbine
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 water follow into
pump
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the pump
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 and reservoir. After high voltage
cables
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 it goes to transformer station to underground cables these into hospitals
as well as
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 schools. There is a long
porcess
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process
 for
generate
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generating
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 electricity for human
use
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. From to sun and
sea going
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sea-going
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 for
long
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the long
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process
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 it goes to
pump
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a pump
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, high voltage cable,
tranformer
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transformer
 station into
undergroud
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underground
 cables
then
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 it goes for hospitals as well schools
then
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 it is good to
use
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.
This
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 long
process
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 for the
hydro-electric
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hydroelectric
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 power generation
which
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apply
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took place before it
is
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was
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 taken for
the
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apply
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use
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.
For
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In
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conclution
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conclusion
, the above information
given
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gives
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an
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a
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 brief idea
for
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of
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 the
process
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 of
Hydro-electric
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Hydroelectric
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 power generation from
sea
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the sea
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 and sun to Hospitals and schools.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, use with synonyms.
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