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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

#humans #environment #governments #address #people
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Environment
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The environment
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 currently is damaged by humans in a wide range of ways, so
that
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they have to take responsibility to limit the effects.
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 essay will explain some
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environment
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environmental
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 problems and what governments and individuals should do to tackle
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this
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these
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 issues. There are two main severe threats to the
environment
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are
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apply
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the
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pollution and waste. Global warming, these days,
are
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is
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 increasingly
become
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becoming
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 the most serious problem
in
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the
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Earth, which is the result of gas emissions from factories and exhaust fumes by vehicles.
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,
the
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 huge quantity of waste is released by people contaminating the Earth and polluting rivers and oceans. Authorities could take many steps to minimize
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this problems
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this problem
these problems
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.
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, the government should impose new laws to restrict
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factory’s
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 gas emissions by using renewable energy in production.
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, it is necessary to improve public transport systems and introduce “green taxes”
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 private cars.
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, politicians need to encourage their citizens to commute by public vehicles, which could help decrease air pollution in major cities. People
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 should be in charge of the urgent environmental concerns. They have to enhance the use of environmentally friendly vehicles
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 as buses or electronic cars
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 of driving, which could reduce the exhaust fumes.
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, people should purchase
recycle
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recycled
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 products in order to avoid releasing too much waste. A good example
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this
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 case is that Vietnamese governments spur their citizens
use
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to use
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 more paper bags when going
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shopping, which could help cut down on plastic bag consumption. In conclusion, both
nation
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national
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 authorities and individuals must understand
devastating
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the devastating
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 impact they have on the
environment
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 and be responsible
about
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 them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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