Towns and cities are attractive places. Some people suggest the government should spend money putting in more works of art like paintings and statues to make them better to live in. Do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a debate about whether more budget should be put

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of art-related facilities, and some believe that

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so can make towns or

cities

more livable places. I cannot agree with

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statement, because there are many other areas that should be given priority to investment.

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with traffic, for

cities

with millions of populations,

transportations

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is as indispensable as the vessels to

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body. The daily necessities of urban residents, convenient online shopping, efficient online meal ordering and so on all depend on the smooth logistics system. It can be imagined that in a crowded metro station, adding an accessible location is obviously

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than the murals to relieve the pressure of commuting hours. Next to afforestation,

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, a green lung is essential to a contemporary city. Until an effective alternative energy is found, the air pollution caused by using fossil fuels will keep your breath hard and your vision limited. At present, the simplest and most effective approach to

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air pollution is greening, which is

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why new construction subjects must ensure certainly

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of planting areas.

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, public green areas and

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can provide opportunities for exercise, leisure, picnics and so on, which are

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irreplaceable by art facilities. In conclusion,

although

art-related installations

such

as paintings and sculptures can make

cities

good looking

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, more investments should

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transportation and afforestation, which can keep

cities

healthy and energetic. Needless to say, if there is a sufficient budget, art should

also

be considered, after all, everyone likes a beautiful city to live in.

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