If you were asked “How to succeed in life”, what advice would you give?

The one whom I’m going to introduce is the founder of my favourite fast food company. You know who?

That is

McDonald, the founder of KFC. I don’t really know well about him, but I have heard that he has confronted many difficulties in his life, especially, on the way to success. I mean He has had numerous failures in his life before. But he never gave up, he tried to do many different jobs to save his life.

Finally

, he found out the best recipe that made him successful and famous.

Due to

this

recipe, his company, KFC, began to flourish, to grow and develop successfully.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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