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Many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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When young people are choosing what subject to study at the level their graduation. jobs. field In and In my some reality opinion are many the even fresh root forced off to
this
graduates
 take problem fail up to below lies find in work the graduate in university, most of them hope they will find a great job upon outdated higher
education
 system that should be modernised. Traditional university
education
 does not prepare
students
 for their first job for a number of reasons. One of them is that many programmes are too theoretical. It means that highly educated
graduates
 lack simple skills required for employment,
for example
, the knowledge of IT software. Employers,
therefore
, prefer candidates with hands-on experience. Another reason is that
universities
 offer too many courses in popular fields,
such
 as business and law, and do not recruit enough
students
 for engineering and science programmes.
As a result
, the UK labour market has an oversupply of law
graduates
 and a deficit of engineers. A reform of higher
education
 could alleviate many of the problems but would require joint efforts from
universities
 and the government. If
universities
 worked closer with employers, they could teach
students
 practical skills that companies look for. Meanwhile, the government could develop guidelines on how many
students
universities
 should recruit in each subject in accordance with the market demand. In conclusion, a likely reason why many
graduates
 cannot find a job in their field is because a university
education
 might not have provided them with the right skill set or an in-demand profession. I think that
universities
 and the government could improve the situation by updating the content of the programmes and limiting the number of
students
 in each subject in line with the market demand.
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