The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.
The maps illustrate how the industrial sector of Norbiton town will convert to a residential area in the future plan.
Overall
, it can be seen that all of the industries will be changed into housing, and the new design will introduce the leisure infrastructure,
such
as an educational area and a playing zone. Today, there is a main
street
on the south
side
of the map that has a path to the
center
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ring
road
with a way on the east
side
that is
surrounded by factories.
Moreover
, there is a river on the north
side
of the map, with the opposite
side
being farmland. In the future, there will be a new ring
road
connected at the join to the old ring, with the old industries that surround the ring
road
will be
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removed and replaced with new streets in the north and northwest that lead to the residential zone.
While
the sector between the main
street
and the
center
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centre
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ring
road
will be established
the
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shopping area and healthcare; the east
street
from the
center
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centre
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ring
road
will lead to the new school, and in the middle of
this
path will be added the playground, which has housings both sides of
this
street
.
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