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The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.
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The maps illustrate how the industrial sector of Norbiton town will convert to a residential area in the future plan.
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, it can be seen that all of the industries will be changed into housing, and the new design will introduce the leisure infrastructure,
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 as an educational area and a playing zone. Today, there is a main
street
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 on the south
side
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 of the map that has a path to the
center
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centre
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 ring
road
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 with a way on the east
side
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that is
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 surrounded by factories.
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, there is a river on the north
side
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 of the map, with the opposite
side
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 being farmland. In the future, there will be a new ring
road
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 connected at the join to the old ring, with the old industries that surround the ring
road
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will be
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 removed and replaced with new streets in the north and northwest that lead to the residential zone.
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 the sector between the main
street
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 and the
center
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centre
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 ring
road
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 will be established
the
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for the
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 shopping area and healthcare; the east
street
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 from the
center
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centre
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 ring
road
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 will lead to the new school, and in the middle of
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 path will be added the playground, which has housings both sides of
this
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street
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words street, side, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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