Tourism is an ever growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

Nowadays going to other
country
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and gaining more knowledge from there has been increasing for ten years. popular companies are
attracting
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to
the
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tourism
despite
as
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per
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my perspective,
tourism
offer
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more advantages not only
people
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to people
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but
also
community. In
this
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i
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would
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explain clearly about both points. There are numerous merits why exploration could be welfare for the person. First and foremost, having taken
job
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in
this
field can be easier than
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other field
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as
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if they
would
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have
money
so they
were
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live in better lifestyle.
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,
masses
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may
fell
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feel
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relax
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if they
will
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have success in their life.
For instance
, in
india
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,
people
are facing stressful
situation
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due to
low income
as well as
less opportunity to pass any entrance exam to get
success
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job
hence
, going
to
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different
journey
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journeys
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and taking
job
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from there must for the individual.
however
,
people
can learn distinct
culture
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cultures
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from there when they go to different overseas
in addition
, it must be fruitful for the crowd because they can use
anywhere
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in their life. On the other side if
i
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talk about the public how
tourism
can be
profit
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for them.
To begin
with,
government
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can earn
money
from
the
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tourism
and they may boost their
economy
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level as
growing
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city
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cities
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or
nation
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will be
powerful
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than other countries if they have more
money
and
best
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infrastructure.
Moreover
, they can make their own building to improve not only culture but
also
making
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roads in their society
due to
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that
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it
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can give more benefits than other things.
For example
, in Asia.
people
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go there to see different types of scenery and different
culture
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cultures
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so, they give
money
for
ticket
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tickets
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and it would be beneficial for
there
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their
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country.
in
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conclusion,
although
tourism
are
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essential for every
people
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person
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but
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it has more advantages to
get
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getting
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job
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a job
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than
group
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the group
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.
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