The pie charts below show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.

The pie charts below show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.
The pie chart illustrates the recreational
activities
among grown-up people in Europe in the years 1985 and 1995.
Overall
, most relaxation
activities
are used by people watching
TV
and the least are others.
To begin
with, in the
year
1985 watching
TV
was the most favorite
activity
among adults is 32%. Followed by watching
TV
eating out is
also
the second most likely
activity
by 23%.
Also
, talking with friends is 21% and talking with family is 18% at
last
other
activities
are not that famous as the above
activities
are only 6%.
On the other hand
, in the
year
,1995 some of the entertainment
activities
were changed and newer
activities
.
While
watching
TV
has the top of the rank but it has decreased by 2% to the
year
1985. Playing computer games as a newly added pastime
activity
has the second most used by 27%.
Although
talking with friends increased in the
year
19958 by 5% , it was not the least favourite
activity
in 1985.
Also
talking with family has decreased by 11%.
In addition
, eating out is reduced by 15% and others fall off by 4%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, tv, year, activity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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