The pie charts below show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.
The pie chart illustrates the recreational
activities
among grown-up people in Europe in the years 1985 and 1995.
Overall
, most relaxation activities
are used by people watching TV
and the least are others.
To begin
with, in the year
1985 watching TV
was the most favorite activity
among adults is 32%. Followed by watching TV
eating out is also
the second most likely activity
by 23%. Also
, talking with friends is 21% and talking with family is 18% at last
other activities
are not that famous as the above activities
are only 6%.
On the other hand
, in the year
,1995 some of the entertainment activities
were changed and newer activities
. While
watching TV
has the top of the rank but it has decreased by 2% to the year
1985. Playing computer games as a newly added pastime activity
has the second most used by 27%. Although
talking with friends increased in the year
19958 by 5% , it was not the least favourite activity
in 1985. Also
talking with family has decreased by 11%. In addition
, eating out is reduced by 15% and others fall off by 4%.Submitted by swapnilingale1155 on
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