The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne.

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The table gives us information about the amounts of junk food consumed in Melbourne.

Overall

, hamburgers will stay strong as the most

ate

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fast food, fried chicken

projected

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to be the second significant junk food,

whereas

fried rice and noodles

predicted

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to stay the same throughout the period. There was

high

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amount of consumed hamburgers by 2005

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units

and it is going to gain

its

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popularity in 2025

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units

By contrast

, fried chicken gradually rose in consumed

units

today by 37 and will

be continue

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its growth in 2025 by 45

units

. Salads will face significant growth in consumption,

consequently

from 5

units

in 2005 to 41

units

in 2025. Fried rice and noodles remained the same in 2005 and only saw

a small changes

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in consumption by 9 and 8

units

,respectively. It is projected that,

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, all

the

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three previous fast foods

changed

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dramatically,

whereas

fried rice and noodles will be equally least consumed fast foods in 2025 as 9

units

for both of them.

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The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

One of your friends recently had a birthday celebration, but you missed it and, you forgot to tell your friend that you couldnt attend.

Some people think that national news is very important and we should be up to date with national news. However, some says international news is more important as we should stay up to date with that. Discuss both and give your opinion

Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

'People who do not use social media networks* will always fall behind in career development opportunities.' To what extent do you feel that this is an accurate and important prediction?

Some people say that what individuals do to protect cannot make difference, others say that individuals can protect environment. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.