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The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne.

The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne.
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The table gives us information about the amounts of junk food consumed in Melbourne.
Overall
Linking Words
, hamburgers will stay strong as the most
ate
Wrong verb form
eaten
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 fast food, fried chicken
projected
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is projected
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 to be the second significant junk food,
whereas
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 fried rice and noodles
predicted
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are predicted
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 to stay the same throughout the period. There was
high
Add an article
a high
the high
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 amount of consumed hamburgers by 2005
as
Change preposition
at
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 40
units
Use synonyms
 and it is going to gain
its
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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popularity in 2025
by
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at
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 51
units
Use synonyms
.
By contrast
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, fried chicken gradually rose in consumed
units
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 today by 37 and will
be continue
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continue
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 its growth in 2025 by 45
units
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. Salads will face significant growth in consumption,
consequently
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 from 5
units
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 in 2005 to 41
units
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 in 2025. Fried rice and noodles remained the same in 2005 and only saw
a small changes
Correct the article-noun agreement
small changes
a small change
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 in consumption by 9 and 8
units
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,respectively. It is projected that,
therefore
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, all
the
Correct article usage
apply
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three previous fast foods
changed
Wrong verb form
will change
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 dramatically,
whereas
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 fried rice and noodles will be equally least consumed fast foods in 2025 as 9
units
Use synonyms
 for both of them.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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