The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
The given bar charts analyse
number
of people who have owned a Change the article
a number
the number
computer
as percentages of population
and by the education levels from 2002 to 2010. As an overview, the graphs Correct article usage
the population
have
an increasing trend over the Verb problem
show
years
and computer
possession seem
to be higher amongst the highly qualified people.
In the Correct subject-verb agreement
seems
9- year
period, the ownerships have been Correct your spelling
9-year
in
the rise, Change preposition
on
however
small the difference is between the individual years
, from 55% in 2002 to 75% in 2010. Relating this
graph to the level of education, compared to the more recent years
, the earlier years
have a more nomadic trend with only the qualified professionals owning a personal computer
compared to the lowly educated.
A major difference observed is that use
of desktops Correct article usage
the use
have
increased sharply as students acquired a high Change the verb form
has
school
diploma and started college. In 2002, 10 in 100 population with no high school
diploma owned computers whereas
the number raised to almost 40 in 100 once they became a high school
graduate. In 2010, 2 in 5 people owned desktops as school goings
kids and the Correct your spelling
school-going
Fix the agreement mistake
number
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
rised
to 3 in 5 by the time they graduated. The difference is unappreciable though,as they graduate and get a Correct your spelling
rise
rose
raised
post graduate
diploma.
In conclusion, recent Add a hyphen
post-graduate
years
have definitely seen most of the houses with a computer
, more so if there's a qualified professional in the house.Submitted by aishvaryaaishu205 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, years, school with synonyms.
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