Many people today prefer to socialise online rather than spend time with friends in the local community. To what extend do advantages outweight disadvantages?
Nowadays many human
being
opt to spend their Fix the agreement mistake
beings
time
online instead
of meeting friends
and hanging out with them,while
a
least figure of people Change the article
the
choose
to meet Change the verb form
chooses
there
best Correct your spelling
their
friends
out
. Change preposition
apply
Neverethless
there are Correct your spelling
Nevertheless
a
relevant disadvantages. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
theis
essay will argue thatCorrect your spelling
This
,
I feel that for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
one commonly cited Remove the comma
apply
disadvantages
of humans who prefer to discuss with their Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantage
friends
online than
meeting themRephrase
rather than
,
will suffer from Remove the comma
apply
couple
of problems in their lives. Change the article
a couple
Such
as,
speaking publicly and preparing for a presentation, etc. Despite Remove the comma
apply
this
, people who send
their Correct your spelling
spend
time
on sociale
media rather than utilize it for education or building a business, their mental health and well-being willCorrect your spelling
social
sacrifice
. Wrong verb form
be sacrificed
For instance
, my Brother has been spending his time
online overdose
. right now he has an illness, he can't Wrong verb form
overdosing
speaks
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speak
with in
his social life.
Despite Correct your spelling
within
this
, there are a number of significant benefits to the notion if they preference
to socialise with Replace the word
prefer
friends
or families online than go out with them. Additionally
they can organize their Add a comma
Additionally,
time
of
talking, Change preposition
for
also
, studying at the same time
, instead
of meeting them for an hours
you can Correct the article-noun agreement
an hour
hours
discussed
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discuss
whith
them Correct your spelling
with
merely
a minute or one hour maximum. Change preposition
for merely
For example
, I choose to chat with my friends
online rather than sitting in the local community, I have been found
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spending
an extra hours
on my planning, Correct the article-noun agreement
extra hours
an extra hour
instead
of that Correct word choice
and instead
i
consume a little bit of energy.
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I
To conclude
, although
there are drowbacks
if humans Correct your spelling
drawbacks
talking
daily online they will suffer from Wrong verb form
talk
multi
symptoms physically and mentally, Correct word choice
multiple
While
the satisfaction is the time
that include
triviality will Change the verb form
includes
decreased
.Change the verb form
decrease
be decreased
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