Many people today prefer to socialise online rather than spend time with friends in the local community. To what extend do advantages outweight disadvantages?

Nowadays many human
being
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opt to spend their
time
online
instead
of meeting
friends
and hanging out with them,
while
a
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least figure of people
choose
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to meet
there
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their
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best
friends
out
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.
Neverethless
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Nevertheless
there are
a
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relevant disadvantages.
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This
essay will argue that
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I feel that for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay. one commonly cited
disadvantages
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of humans who prefer to discuss with their
friends
online
than
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rather than
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meeting them
,
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will suffer from
couple
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of problems in their lives.
Such
as
,
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speaking publicly and preparing for a presentation, etc. Despite
this
, people who
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spend
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their
time
on
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social
media rather than utilize it for education or building a business, their mental health and well-being will
sacrifice
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be sacrificed
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.
For instance
, my Brother has been spending his
time
online
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. right now he has an illness, he can't
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with in
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within
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his social life. Despite
this
, there are a number of significant benefits to the notion if they
preference
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to socialise with
friends
or families online than go out with them.
Additionally
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they can organize their
time
of
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talking,
also
, studying at the same
time
,
instead
of meeting them for
an hours
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you can
discussed
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whith
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with
them
merely
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for merely
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a minute or one hour maximum.
For example
, I choose to chat with my
friends
online rather than sitting in the local community, I have been
found
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spending
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an extra hours
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an extra hour
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on my planning,
instead
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and instead
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of that
i
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consume a little bit of energy.
To conclude
,
although
there are
drowbacks
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drawbacks
if humans
talking
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talk
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daily online they will suffer from
multi
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multiple
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symptoms physically and mentally,
While
the satisfaction is the
time
that
include
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triviality will
decreased
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be decreased
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.
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