Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend?

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
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extreme activities. It is undeniable that sport
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has become
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essential part of our life.
However
, these days people think that those
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passions
are relatively risky for our life.
Firstly
, it is very
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that extreme sports are curios and breathtaking. What I mean here is that
while
we doing unsafe activities our
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organisation
produces adrenaline
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and sign delivers to
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glands. A good case in point is mountain climbing,
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and
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popular route is climbing to Everest mountain which is located in
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. Most people
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on the way to
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the mountain
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but it is not
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to
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. It
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like a competition between rock climbers.
On the other hand
, it can
also
be argued that
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of
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.
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to say by nature a human
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so he wants to challenge himself to know does he can do it or not. Take
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example, diving -
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water
swimming, the special of
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is constant locating under the
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of special equipment. Tourist diving
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not provide the
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except
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species. These are cave-diving and rack-diving. The main
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is
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to
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quick ascent
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obstacles, low temperature of
water
, almost darkness and
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to
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. By the way, one popular diver set a record in the South African cave having been since 5 hours under the
water
. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned
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into account in our final analysis we can say that risky activities negatively
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beginners who
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to try.
As a result
, high
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of death in certain
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.
However
, we can not ban the extreme
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hobbies
hobby
that
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satisfies
satisfy
a minority of professionals.
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