More and more people are choosing to travel abroad for their holidays. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

Nowadays,
travailing
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overseas is popular for vacation.
However
,
this
essay will
examin
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examine
the drawbacks and the benefits of going
in
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abroad trips.
To begin
with, there are a number of benefits for
travailing
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abroad.
Firstly
, allowed
individuals
to have time for themselves to relax and think about the next step.In
the
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other words,
journey
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overseas is the better place for deep breaths because
individuals
are out of all
live
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and
works
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stresses. so, they can
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be thinking
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in
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of
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a plan for soon future .
For instance
, a survey done in 2023 at Sultan Qaboos University showed that 80% of people who spend their vacation abroad return to their
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with more
powerful
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.
Secondly
, gives travellers opportunities to acquire
second
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a second
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language faster because he/she will communicate with local speakers.
For example
,
according to
OmanTV 90% of those who
travels
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success
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to own
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in owning
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a second language in a short time.
Therefore
, it seems logical that travelling abroad
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a trends
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trends
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this
days.
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the other hand,
ther
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there
are
som
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some
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drawbacks of having
trip
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a trip
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abroad
such
as,it could be difficult to communicate with native speakers and in some cases
individuals
may feel under
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misunderstanding
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and
this
will lead to problems.
Other
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disadvantage is spending money in foreign countries
instead
of spending
this
money in
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an individuals
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individuals
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own country which may help to improve the country’s
economies
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economy
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.
Moreover
,the travellers may
found
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find
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themselves
on
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in
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a country where the food is not suitable for them or,
in
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delicious.
For example
, pig meats are not allowed in Islam.so, not all meat is suitable for
Moslems
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Muslims
.
Thus
, some people are suffering when they are travelling abroad. In conclusion,
Although
journeys abroad have positives
such
as
,
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acquiring a second language faster than at home and having time for relaxation , there are some drawbacks like, communication difficulties with local people and suitable food are not always available.
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