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One of the widely discussed and debated issues in present time is amount of money that the construction of road requires

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One of the widely discussed and debated issues in
present
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the present
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 time is
amount
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the amount
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 of money that the construction of
road
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roads
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 requires. Now people are beginning to realise that
railways
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 could be more effective compared to the roads. Personally, I tend to believe that developing
well planned
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railways
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 could make peoples’ lives easier
as well as
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 it would encourage current technologies to evolve.
Firstly
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, it is well known that trains move
in
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higher
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a higher
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 speed and at the same time one of the most stable transports compared to cars. What I mean here is that for society it would be faster and
therefore
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 beneficial to use a railway rather than getting stuck in
traffic
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a traffic
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 jam. A good case here can be underground which is
quite
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quite a
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 popular type of transport in many countries. It is approximately the same price as
taxi
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a taxi
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 and can get you to a certain place in
a
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the
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 blink of an eye.
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, it can be
also
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 argued that
well constructed
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well-constructed
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railways
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 are
the
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a
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 sign of a developed country.
This
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 is to say that buildings of
railways
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 would have a
significance
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 impact in improving the field of technology in a state.
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, Japan which is in the leading position among other governments,
in
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as
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 a result of numerous experiments and studies as well, created the fastest train in the world. Having weighed everything mentioned
up
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apply
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, we can come to the conclusion that investing in
railways
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 rather than roads could be
more
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a more
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 advantageous option for countries
due to
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 the
facts
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 that it leads to
the
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apply
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innovation breakthroughs and
more
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is more
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 convenient for people as well.

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