The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

The diagrams below show the changes  that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.
The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Three diagrams with difference 40
years
,1960,80 and 2000 . In 1960,departments were equally divided .Nearby
main
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the main
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road
were
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was
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shopping
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a shopping
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centre
,
hospital
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a hospital
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and under them farmland and
car
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a car
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park
. During the 20
years
,there was
change
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a change
the change
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in front of
hospital
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the hospital
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.
Shopping
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The shopping
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centre
was divided
for
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into
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2 blocks .Cancer
Centre
and Pharmacy. Farmland was replaced by Nursing School.
Car
park
and Hospital were
on
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in
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their place invariably . The next 20
years
was
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were
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another change .
Cancer
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The Cancer
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Centre
which was
shopping
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a shopping
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centre
early
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earlier
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,
get
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got
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bigger. Took
a
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the
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place of Nursing school.
Therefore
Nursing
school
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schools
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reduced
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are reduced
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in size.
Car
park
too
came
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tocame
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lessen. Only Hospital and
Car
park
didnt
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didn't
changed
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change
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. For 40
years
there
wasn’t
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weren’t
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many changes,but,difference atten
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