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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shop that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shop that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 line chart depicts
amount
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the amount
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 of
stores
 that closed and the number of
resent
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recent
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stores
 that opened in one country from 2011 to 2018. It is clear from the graph that the number of
shops
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 closures show a steady level for all the interval, except in 2015.
According to
 what is shown, the figure
of
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 the
stores
 that closed fluctuated between 6000 and above 7000 from 2011 to 2014, After which it dropped sharply to its lowest point, about 600,
however
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this
 number rocketed to nearly 5000 before
levelled
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 until the end of the span. Opening
stores
on
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 the other hand, sunk significantly by 4500 in 2012,
nevertheless
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 it decreased gradually to approximately 6000,
this
 figure dropped again to its 2012 level in 2015, where it remained until it dipped at 3000 in 2018.
To sum up
, we could say that,
in
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 the end of the period, closed
stores
 and new
stores
 are much less than the first period.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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