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One of the widely discussed topics nowadays is exploring the space.

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One of the widely discussed topics nowadays is exploring
the
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space.
However
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,
this
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 kind of
missions
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are contribute
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huge
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a huge
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 amount of resources, which
led
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 to disputes about the need
of
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such
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researches
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. Now people are beginning to realize that Earth have numerous
of
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problems which
also
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 demand attention. Today
propponents
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proponents
proponent
 for reducing the
numbers
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 of
explore
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is
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are
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 increasing.
Personally
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 I tend to think that our planet
have
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 big troubles which humanity
have
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 to fix to transfer outside of it.
Firstly
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 it is well known that
scales
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 of ecological issues
in
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 Earth are remarkably huge. It means that in
findings
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 of convenient places in
galaxy
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the galaxy
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, we can
lost
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lose
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 our planet. One of the behind
that is
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 massive pollution. Every year around
100000km2
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100,000 km2,
surface
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the surface
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 of the ground is polluted by chemical toxins which destroys
ecosystems
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the ecosystems
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 of
that
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places with
extinction
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the extinction
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 of flora and fauna. A good case in point is
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the "Black
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point
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 of Pacific Ocean" where
rubbishes
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 from
over
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 the world
collected
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 by flows and made
huge
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a huge
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 island which is bigger than
whole
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the whole
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France
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 territory.
Becouse
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Because
 of
this
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 accident approximately
one tenth
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 of marine
lives are
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life
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 died. It seems a not big amount, but in
case
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 of
Pacific
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the Pacific
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,ocean
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ocean
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 it means millions of
fishes
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fish
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, turtles and plants.
The nature
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 is the first thing which humanity
have
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protect
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.
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, in
capitalistic
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a capitalistic
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world
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 there is a significant number of problems in society. In
other word
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, in poor
countries
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,countries
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 the high level of
jobelessness
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joblessness
, hunger and
crime killing
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crime-killing
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 rules of humanism. If the finances
devided
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divided
 for space projects
will provide to supporting
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would support
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 poorer states, it is undeniable that society would develop faster than ever. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in my final analysis I can say that missions to explore space are hugely
expencive
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expensive
. It would be better
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 if
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this
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these
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 resources will
spend
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for
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on
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solution
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the solution
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 of
on Earth
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on-earth
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 issues.

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