The diagram above displays the information on producing process of hydro-electricity.

The diagram above displays the information on producing process of hydro-electricity.
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The diagram above displays the information on producing process of
hydro-electricity
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hydroelectricity
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.
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, power from
water
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is produced by liquid steam which
made
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to move
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tourbine
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the turbine
. The electricity collected
in
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generator
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the generator
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is transferred to specific places,
while
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water
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from
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the tourbine
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tourbine
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the turbine
goes
to
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underground. First of all, the
water
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trapped
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is trapped
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in
reservoir
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the reservoir
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by
dam
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the dam
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and forced through an intake.
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the
water
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flow
is
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goes into
narrow
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a narrow
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chamber called Pentstock, where the
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tourbine
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turbine
is
turning
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turned
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by
the
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apply
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high pressure. The
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tourbine
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turbine
is
connected
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a connected
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generator in Powerhouse to convert mechanical energy into electricity.
Subsequently
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,
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resulting
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resulted
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inresulted
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electrical energy is
transporting
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transported
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via
long distance
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long-distance
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power lines. After
the
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apply
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giving mechanical energy to
generator
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the generator
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water
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is
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apply
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goes to
other
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another water source
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water
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source by channels
under ground
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underground
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. It is interesting to note that producing
of
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power by steam
is
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does
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not
creates
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create
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a harmful bioproducts
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harmful bioproducts
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as
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fossil fuels. After the
tourbine
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stage,
water
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flows out through
channel
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the channel
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to
underground
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the underground
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.
Morever
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Moreover
thanks to
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water
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the water
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cycle in nature the process is renewable.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, tourbine with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "displays" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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