The pie charts illustrate the total production of electricity measured in units and divided by different sources of fuel in Australia and France in the year 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts illustrate the total production of electricity measured in units and divided by different sources of fuel in Australia and France in the year 1980 

and 2000.
The pie charts illustrate the total
production
of
electricity
measured in
units
and divided by different sources of fuel in
Australia
and
France
in the
year
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years
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1980 and 2000.
It is clear that
major fuel sources utilised in
electricity
production
were different in
Australia
and
France
.
According to
the picture
Australia
produced 100
units
of
electricity
in 1980 and 170
units
in 2000
while
the
production
in
France
was 90
units
and it doubled in the year 2000 in comparison with
the
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France
.The figures were ninety and 180
units
respectively.In
Australia
, coal was the main source of
electricity
production
and half of the total
electricity
produced came from coal in 1980.Natural gas and hydropower contributed
of
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producing 20
units
of electrical charge
while
remaining
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the remaining
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10
units
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were wasproduced
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wasproduced
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produced
from oil. It could be noticed that the dependency on coal increased in 2000 for electrical energy manufacture,
whereas
oil and natural gases were very minimally used for generation.
Meanwhile
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in
France
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native gas and ember together produced half of the electromagnetism in 1980.The utilise of nuclear power increased significantly in
France
in 2000 amounting
126
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number in
this
year compared to the fifteen
units
20 years
back
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ago
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