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Main reasons of immigration and emigration in the UK in 2007

The given two pie charts illustrate data about the reasons why the UK's population had immigration and emigration in 2007.
Overall
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, there are 6 reasons why people in the United Kingdom leave their country or visit
this
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 place Most of them move to another city or abroad because of
job
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-related duties.
While
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 a tiny percentage of the population moved to another country to study and changed the city without any reason. It is crystal clear that 30% and 26% of people living in the UK had immigrated in order to do
job
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 tasks and study in good condition.
In addition
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, people who are looking for a
job
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 were 12 per cent of immigrations and applying is double more than leaving the city without any excuses.
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, more than a quarter and less than it (29% and 22%) included emigrations of definite
job
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 and trying to find a
job
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. On the opposite side, a small proportion of them were students who wanted to have a formal study.

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