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Countries with a long average working time are more economically successfull than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extend you agree or disagree?

#countries #time #successfull
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Over the
last
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 two or three decades, the way
people
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work
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 has changed dramatically
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 advancements in technology. It is said that nations are financially strong where individuals devote more
hours
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 to
work
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 than countries where there are no long working
hours
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. I completely agree with
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 point of view and I will support my opinion with examples. To start with, extra working
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 increases the productivity of the company which obviously contributes towards the advancement of the
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 and
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 the
overall
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 economy.
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, a
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 where employees perform more than normal
time
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 will generate higher production than a nation where
people
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work
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 for limited
hours
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 which will result in the fluctuation of economic growth of the community. Another worth considering factor is the active involvement of the workers.
People
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 who spend more
time
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 at
job
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 are found to be more active and fresh because if they have a deadline to meet every day, they will use every hook and crook to accomplish the target which will keep them busy and involved
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 less workload and working
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 make the employees lazy and make them struggle to qualify the target within the specified
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 limit.
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, the economic growth of the nation is the result of the hard
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 and willingness of the workers which can be fulfilled by participating actively.
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, sometimes overtime can not help because, in many parts of the world, quality over quantity is preferred. As long as there is a positive development in the
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 and
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believe
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 in quality
work
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 within limited
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hours
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 without compromising the quality of the
work
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.
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, I agree that long
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 are responsible for the
overall
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 economic prosperity of the
country
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 as it enhance productivity and makes
people
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 active which is indeed necessary for the financial and economic growth of the nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Productivity
  • Efficiency
  • Innovative technologies
  • Skilled labor
  • Employee well-being
  • Burnout
  • Mental health issues
  • Job satisfaction
  • Work-life balance
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Economic growth
  • Economic output
  • Governmental policies
  • Infrastructure
  • Social welfare
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