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It is common nowadays for each member of the family to have their own piece of modern technology. Some people think this will lead to a break down in family relationships and communication.(To what extent do you agree?)

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It is indeed true that nowadays everyone has their own pieces of modern
technology
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such
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 as mobile
phone
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phones
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,
laptops
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and laptops
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.
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However
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 some individuals believe that it would be a trouble to maintain a good relationship and communication system with their family
members
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. I completely agree with the given statement.
To begin
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 with, nowadays most
people
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 spend their free
time
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 with mobile phones rather than their family
members
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. They spend their
time
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by
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watching movies or playing video games, which is one of the reasons they don't have much
time
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 to talk with their family
members
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.
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,
according to
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 recent
data
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 half
million
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a million
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of
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students use mobile
phone
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phones
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 for watching movies or playing video games in Bangladesh.
Secondly
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, most of the
time
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 when someone comes back from their jobs or schools with a brick pressure
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then
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they avoid their family
members
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 to talk with them. They use
technology
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 so that they can reduce their stress. In fact most of the
time
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 they spend most of
the
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their
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time
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 without talking to their family
members
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for
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on
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 mobile
phone
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phones
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 or other devices where they can spend their free
time
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. It not only creates caps between their family
members
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 but
also
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it
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affects their social life.
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,
according to
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 research by New
york's
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york
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time
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 they show every five
people
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 in the world have a gap with their family
member
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members
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 for using mobile phones.
To conclude
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, I believe that
technology
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 is good for
people
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's social life but our use of
technology
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 will create gaps
of
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in
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 communication with family
members
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 and other
people
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.
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