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The grap below shows the percentage of adults whose healthcare needs went unmet in the past year from 2008 to 2022 in 6 different european nations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Write at least 150 words.

The grap below shows the percentage of adults whose healthcare needs went unmet in the past year from 2008 to 2022 in 6 different european nations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Write at least 150 words.
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This
 report derives from the line graph which illustrates the proportion of people over 18 who took inadequate healthcare in six various European states between 2008 and 2022. A good starting point would be to say that the ratio of Latvia, Sweden, and Estonia fluctuated over the years
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, whilst the United Kingdom (UK), France, and Ireland were relatively stable up to 2018. The first result worth pointing out is that the rate of people who were from Latvia led the pack in 2008 with over 15%,
while
 Sweden followed its ratio with just under 15%.
On the other hand
,
according to
 the graph, Estonia started
this
 competition with approximately 10% and experienced the most considerable fluctuations between 2008 and 2022. In 2022, the percentages of all three countries were close, which was nearly 10%. Another information that can be observed is that the UK, France, and Ireland remained stable with a ratio of around 5% until 2018.
However
, after 2018, the UK lived significantly rising which started from below 5% and ended at 15%. The percentages of France and Ireland were more than 5%, and just below 5% in 2022, respectively.
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