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The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between! 1980 and 2012.

The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between! 1980 and 2012.
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The line chart illustrates the amount of
electricity
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 produced by different sources of
power
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 in
terawatt
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hours
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 over the period of 32 years. Generally speaking, nuclear
power
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 is by far the most important in generating
electricity
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,
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however
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 renewable
power
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 is almost the least
electricity
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 production In 1980, Thermal
power
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is
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 used to produce over 100
terawatt
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hours
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.
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 , almost below 50
terawatt
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hours
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 was produced by Hydroelectric and nuclear
power
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 stations.
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, renewable
power
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 was a negligible source in the mentioned period .
between
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 1980 and 2012, nuclear
power
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 dramatically rose in generating
electricity
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while
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 the thermal fell in producing
electricity
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 to nearly 40
terawatt
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hours
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 . Hydroelectricity remained stable through the given period.
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 renewable was the only source which did not clearly increase until 2015 .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, terawatt, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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