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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates a guideline for
electricity
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 production in a hydroelectric power station. As a part of
this
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 station name, the word 'hydro' refers to using energy which comes from
water
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 and
this
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 diagram shows every step of manufacturing
electricity
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 by it. As
it
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apply
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can be seen, the river
water
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 comes into a container named a high-level
reservoir
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. The gathered
water
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 in the container
flows
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 in the day from intake.
This
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 intake is closed at night. During the day- time,
water
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flows
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 to generate
electricity
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. When it arrives at the power station, it
flows
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 into the reversible
turbines
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. These
turbines
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 are occupied with manufacturing
electricity
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 by their movements and storing the produced
electricity
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 in the generator in the day-time. These
turbines
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also
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 operate a pumping
water
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 mission into the high-level
reservoir
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. Meanwhile,
turbines
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 produce
electricity
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 and store it in the generator, the
electricity
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 which was produced before is reachable to the national grid by power lines.
At the end
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 of the journey of
water
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,
water
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 which is used for
electricity
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 production
flows
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 by the gate to a low-level
reservoir
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 in the daytime.
However
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, the
water
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 which had been stored during the daytime at the low-level
reservoir
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 is pumped up by
turbines
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 to the high-level
reservoir
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 at night.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water, reservoir, flows, turbines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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