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There is a big influence of peer groups on children’s behavior. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is a big
affect
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of
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children
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 who are
whith
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with
their
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 same age but there are few benefits that can outweigh the disadvantages and these will be discussed. BIG PROBLEM
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DON'T
DONT
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DO UNDERSTAND
UNDERESTAND
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UNDERSTAND
, UNDERSTAND EACH OTHER, MORE FUN
Chilrens
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Children
 go with people who are more like them and have
same
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 personality.
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,
children
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 hang out with their age but it gets to
problem
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the problem
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 when peer groups of
children
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they
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do not have experience as much as older people.
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, playing video games is
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 time for
children
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