WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The given line graph illustrates the link between
age
and crime
rate while
the pie chart demonstrates kinds of the criminal actions in the UK for the previous year.
Overall
, it can be seen that adults aged from 16 to 20 have committed crimes
more than both younger and older people while
the violent type of crime
has indicated the highest index compared to other types for last
year.
Firstly
, there were no cases of crime
between children from 0 to 8 years of age
. However
, the quantity of crimes
wa began from 8 age
to 20 age
and the number of crimes
was enhanced
dramatically from Wrong verb form
increased
3 000
to 80 000. Correct your spelling
3,000
On the other hand
, this
index started
fall down steadily from 80 000 to 20 000 Add the particle
tostarted
crimes
for 28 ages people. Among the oldest people the number of crimeshas
a steady drop to 10 000 Correct your spelling
crimes has
crimes as
crimes
for the 60-year-old.
Secondly
, violent crime
has almost half percentage
among types of Correct article usage
the percentage
crime
for
46%. Change preposition
apply
However
, property crime
and drug crime
were similar at 23% and 22% respectively. Finally
, public order crime
has a lower percentage in comparison with other types for
9%.Change preposition
at
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime, crimes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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