WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The given line graph illustrates the link between
age
and
crime
rate
while
the pie chart demonstrates kinds of the criminal actions in the UK for the previous year.
Overall
, it can be seen that adults aged from 16 to 20 have committed
crimes
more than both younger and older people
while
the violent type of
crime
has indicated the highest index compared to other types for
last
year.
Firstly
, there were no cases of
crime
between children from 0 to 8 years of
age
.
However
, the quantity of
crimes
wa began from 8
age
to 20
age
and the number of
crimes
was enhanced
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increased
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dramatically from
3 000
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3,000
to 80 000.
On the other hand
,
this
index
started
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tostarted
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fall down steadily from 80 000 to 20 000
crimes
for 28 ages people. Among the oldest people the number of
crimeshas
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crimes has
crimes as
a steady drop to 10 000
crimes
for the 60-year-old.
Secondly
, violent
crime
has almost half
percentage
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the percentage
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among types of
crime
for
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apply
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46%.
However
, property
crime
and drug
crime
were similar at 23% and 22% respectively.
Finally
, public order
crime
has a lower percentage in comparison with other types
for
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at
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9%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime, crimes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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