WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The given line graph illustrates the link between
age
and Use synonyms
crime
rate Use synonyms
while
the pie chart demonstrates kinds of the criminal actions in the UK for the previous year.
Linking Words
Overall
, it can be seen that adults aged from 16 to 20 have committed Linking Words
crimes
more than both younger and older people Use synonyms
while
the violent type of Linking Words
crime
has indicated the highest index compared to other types for Use synonyms
last
year.
Linking Words
Firstly
, there were no cases of Linking Words
crime
between children from 0 to 8 years of Use synonyms
age
. Use synonyms
However
, the quantity of Linking Words
crimes
wa began from 8 Use synonyms
age
to 20 Use synonyms
age
and the number of Use synonyms
crimes
Use synonyms
was enhanced
dramatically from Wrong verb form
increased
3 000
to 80 000. Correct your spelling
3,000
On the other hand
, Linking Words
this
index Linking Words
started
fall down steadily from 80 000 to 20 000 Add the particle
tostarted
crimes
for 28 ages people. Among the oldest people the number of Use synonyms
crimeshas
a steady drop to 10 000 Correct your spelling
crimes has
crimes as
crimes
for the 60-year-old.
Use synonyms
Secondly
, violent Linking Words
crime
has almost half Use synonyms
percentage
among types of Correct article usage
the percentage
crime
Use synonyms
for
46%. Change preposition
apply
However
, property Linking Words
crime
and drug Use synonyms
crime
were similar at 23% and 22% respectively. Use synonyms
Finally
, public order Linking Words
crime
has a lower percentage in comparison with other types Use synonyms
for
9%.Change preposition
at
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime, crimes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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