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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#experts #children #language #schools #school #outweigh
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It is a common belief some scientists encourage
children
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 should start learning a foreign
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language
 at primary
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 but
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 ,I firmly believe that
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 very young age
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 There are too many disadvantages when
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begin learning a foreign
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.First of all, mandating
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learning
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new
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 they have a lot of exercise at
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 and at home .That’s the reason
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 home. On top of there , learning a foreign
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 they have not yet perfected
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 tongue it being full makes
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 have difficulty developing their brains and
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learning a foreign
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 in age brain development should it can acquire new knowledge.For another,
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as to the kids learning a foreign
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 they must learn mother tongue ,that will help them develop memory and have a good foundation in
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 published study illustrates that
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kids can take advantage of
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 cartoons and
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 with mom and dad in
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other languages.
To sum up
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 it is apparent that learning a new
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 has its own pros and cons. It might help kids develop their learning skills and strengthen their multitasking ability,
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 it will put added pressure on them and be confusing
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Enhance
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Pronunciation
  • Mimic
  • Native-like accent
  • Cultural awareness
  • Sensitivity
  • Exposure
  • Resource allocation
  • Qualified
  • Effective instruction
  • Overwhelmed
  • Curriculum
  • Undermining
  • Mother tongue
  • Prioritizing
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