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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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First of all, different countries differ
on
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prices
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 of houses. Some countries have relatively cheaper prices when it comes to houses whilst others do not. In said countries with higher market value for
such
 establishments, they tend to rent
instead
 of
buying
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.
This
 makes it much more
cost efficient
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.
Furthermore
, we do not have to worry about
damages
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 to the
house
 as long as we are not living there for extended periods
of
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them
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apply
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.
Secondly
, we have to take into account the kind of
house
 we are given for the amount of
money
 we are paying. The
house
 we are going to get is most certainly not going to be as good as the one we were to get by renting. The downside to
this
 is that by paying rent the
money
 we are putting in can not be regained whilst if we were to buy a
house
, we can regain the
money
 we place in by selling the
house
.
Additionally
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 we can
also
 modify the
house
 to our liking without having to revert it if we were to own it. But by renting and making changes, we are spending double the amount to
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 and revert the
house
 and
also
 spending double the time. To sum it up,
this
 all depends on where you live. If buying a
house
 is extremely expensive for really bad quality
then
 renting might be the best way.
Whereas
 buying a
house
 can be deemed as a
long term
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 investment as the
money
 placed in can be retrieved as long as the
house
 is sold. There are pros and cons to
this
 situation but for someone with
a
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 abundant amount of
money
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,money
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i
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I
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 believe buying a
house
 is way more
worth
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worthwhile
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while
 than renting one.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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