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The given three pie chart compares the average spending on four kind of food by people in China, India and all over the world in the year 2008 period.

The given three pie chart compares the average spending on four kind of food by people in China, India and all over the world in the year 2008 period.
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The three pie chart compares the average spending on four kinds of
food
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 by people in China,
India
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 and all over the
world
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 in the year 2008 period.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the chart that people in
both
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 countries and the
world
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 spent the most money on processed
food
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.
In addition
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, spending on
Nuts
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 and
seeds
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 was low in
both
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 the nations and the
world
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.
According to
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World
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, processed
food
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 spending highest, stood at 41%, compared to 34% and 39% in China and
India
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.
By contrast
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, the
world
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 accounted 4% of consumer for spending,
while
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 the statistics for China was just 34%, which was 5% lower than that of
India
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. During the same year, the payment for Vegetables and Fruits in the
world
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 was 29%, which was higher than the figure for
India
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(23%) and lower than that of Japan(32%). In terms of Animal
food
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 and
nuts
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 and
seeds
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, family in the
world
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 used their money 26% for
food
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,
while
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 the figure for spending on these items was 11% higher in Japan and 1% lower in
India
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. In the whole
world
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,
Nuts
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 and
seeds
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 spending lowest but
both
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 nations still growing normally.
Nuts
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 and
seeds
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 accounted for the percentage of spending in the
world
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 at 4% which was spending higher in
both
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 Japan and
India
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 between 19% and 11%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, india, world, both, nuts, seeds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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