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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013
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The chart illustrates how often American
people
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 ate in fast food restaurants in the
usa
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US
 from 2003 to 2013. In general, a lot of
people
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frequency
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frequently
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of eating
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eat
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 at once a
week
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 and once or twice a month more than every day and never
did not eating
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eat
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people
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.
In addition
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 , the most of
people
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 almost 32 % of
people
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eat
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ate
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 once a
week
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 in 2003 but in 2006
people
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 who
eat
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ate
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 once a
week
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grown
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grew
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. In 2013 who eat once a
week
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decline
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declined
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by
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25 percentage of 
people
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.
People
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 who
eat
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ate
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 every day
4
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were 4
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percentage
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per cent
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 in 2003, but  in comparison in 2003 more than a little bit 
grown
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grew
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 in other years.
People
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 who eat
never
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are never
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 approximately the same
of
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as
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people
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 who eat every day.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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