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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Advocates for and almost always injects
safety
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 awareness into business activities. Champions
safety
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 metrics and processes and identifies
improvement
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areas
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. Swiftly reports
safety
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 issues and communicates
improvement
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areas
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 to others. Proactively incorporates
safety
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 procedures and prevention into initiatives and offers detailed
areas
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 for
improvement
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. Champions positive driving
behaviors
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behaviours
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,
awareness
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and awareness
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 sessions, and communicates
areas
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 of
improvement
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 and corrective measures to reduce negative driving
behaviors
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behaviours
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 on and off the job. Adheres to GI 6.030 and
educate
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educates
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 others.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words safety, improvement, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 4 times.
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