The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts below
illustrates
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the
percentage
of
households
with electrical appliances and the number of hours spent doing housework in
households
in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, the
percentage
of
households
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households'
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electrical appliances rose.
while
,
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the amount of hours
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housework
decline
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. In1920,the number of using
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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was 0.
However
,
in180
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in 180
it increased sharply to 100 and
then
remained stable.In 1920, the
persentage
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percentage
of
households
with vacuum
cleaner
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was 30 and went up to 100 in 2000.
Whereas
, in 1920, the
percentage
of
households
with
washin
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washing
washin'
machine
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machines
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was 40.
Then
, it fluctuated and
finally
rose to over 70 in 2019.  The
amount
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of hours of work per week was 50 per week in 1920, and it fell sharply to 10 per week in 2019. In 1940, the
persentage
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percentage
of
households
with
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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the
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same as the
percentage
of
households
vacuum
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with vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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and washing
machine
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machines
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almost 50.
In addition
, In 2000, the
persentage
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percentage
of
households
with
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and the
percentage
of
households
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household
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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were ,higher than the number of household washing machines.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, households with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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