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Today different types of robots are being developed which can serve as companions and workers to help at work and at home. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, the use of many versions of gadgets is increasing They can help servers or workers regardless
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whether anywhere, at home or at work. In my opinion, the utilisation of androids makes it easier of housework. In
this
 essay, it will be seen both
sides
.
To begin
 with, There are many benefits of these items.
Due to
 the exceeding of many deeds of
people
, Sometimes, Some of the deeds will remain or In spite of being tired, they go on performing.
As a result
, overtired will originate. So, Having of like these needful things is a delightful situation. Different types of tools which are washing
machine
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,
dishwasher
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,
blender
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 and others play an important role as I write above.
For instance
, In our house, There are nearly all types of items,
In addition
, We can do all the work on time. Writing about the second point,
although
, humans are faced with plus
sides
,
,
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Together with
 these, there are minus
sides
. Extremely using these,
Firstly
, they may lose their health.
Secondly
, it may create too much laziness.
Thirdly
, the Help of robots,
Such
 as, at work, can reduce the number of jobs. If
people
 do not carry out affairs, it affects their health. Why should be mentioned that? Because, By acting, they will be healthy.
Secondly
, extremely taking of androids' assistance, can create both
sides
, laziness and reduction of worklessness,
As a result
 of making use of robots a lot. As an example, In a bank, Owing to the multiplication of accounting money machines, some
people
 lose their jobs.
As a consequence
, they are not fed by their family. Robots may aid as a companion anywhere. I consider, despite drawbacks, it makes easy
people
 healthy life.
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task response
Ensure that you fully address the prompt by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of the development in more detail. Provide specific examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the organization of your essay by using clear topic sentences, connecting ideas, and providing a stronger introduction and conclusion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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