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Some people believe that global warming is today’s most pressing environmental problem. At the same time, some consider deforestation to have the most devastating impact on the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion on the same.

Nowadays there is constant debate on
enviornmental
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environmental
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 global warming and deforestation
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on
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 the top of the list. Some people believe that overexploitation of
forest
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 is
major
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 concern to
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the enviornement
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enviornement
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environment
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 some argue that global warming is
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 problem that we have to look after.
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 effects of each and will reach to conclusion. To commence with, Global warming
driven
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 by the excessive emission of greenhouse gases
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 as carbon dioxide. Which leads to
rise
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 in
temprature
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temperature
.
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excessive
 use of
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fossil
 fuel
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huge
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 amount of carbon dioxide.
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 it leads to higher
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temperature
temperatures
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, global warming increases heatwave that
melt
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 polar ice
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and alslo
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alslo
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also
 it
rises
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 the sea level.
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 it
disrupt
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 the ecosystem.
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, disruption in
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results
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 food and water scarcity.
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, it causes loss of diversity and ocean acidification.
On the other hand
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, deforestation causes many negative effects
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the enviornment
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enviornment
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environment
 including global warming. To illustrate, when someone
cut
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 down the forests or
tress
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trees
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, carbon dioxide within tress
release
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in
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 the air. It results in
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the greenhouse
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 effect which leads to global warming. Another point is ,
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reduce
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 the rainfall and breaks the water cycle. Because of
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, loss of
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habitat
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lastly
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, it
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 causes soil erosion. To summarise, by agglomerating all the points aforementioned above one can reach to conclusion that deforestation is
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 major issue for
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the enviorment
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enviorment
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environment
 as it increases global warming too.
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however
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 in my opinion , we can combat
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 issue by implying some basic rules
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 aforestation program.

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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global warming
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Fossil fuels
  • Rising sea levels
  • Polar ice caps
  • Extreme weather events
  • Deforestation
  • Habitat loss
  • Biodiversity hotspots
  • Water cycle disruption
  • Carbon storage
  • Catastrophic climate events
  • Ecosystems
  • Global economy disruption
  • Urgent collaboration
  • Policy-making
  • Climate change mitigation
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