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The pie charts below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The display pie chart describes the
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reason
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 why
people
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 left the
UK
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 for other countries and why
people
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 stayed in the
UK
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. The below information
in
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 given in %. The
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reason
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reasons
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 are Joint family/
friends
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, language, employment, financial
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, weather
as well
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and
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 life quality. The
reasons
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 why
people
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 left the
UK
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,
the
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 main
reason
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 for leaving was
joined
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 family/
friends
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 with 39%,
due to
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 weather 24% left, because of employment 18% left,
also
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 because of financial
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reason
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was
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10% and life quality was 9%. , The
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 why
people
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 stay in the
UK
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, the highest was
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 join family/
friends
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 with 34%, language was 25%, employment was 19%, financial
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 was 17% and but 5% was life quality. Most
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people
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 stay because of family and
friends
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.
To conclude
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, the above information shows the
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 why
people
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 left and
stay
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stayed
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 in the
UK
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. The main
reasons
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 are the 6
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 for staying in the
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 and leaving the
UK
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reason, people, uk, friends, reasons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
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