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The chat below gives information about the ageing population worldwide in 2000 and makes predictions for 2050. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main futures, and make comparison where relevant.

The chat below gives information about the ageing population worldwide in 2000 and makes predictions for 2050. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main futures, and make comparison where relevant.
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The chart depicts information related to age 60 and over which is population in the worldwide in the year 2000, and the predicted society in 2050. The data is described in percentages.
Overall
, at the beginning of , the year only a few communities had a chance to live longer.
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, there is a considerable chance for people to live over 60 in 2050 in all countries. From the data in 2000, the total shows that the highest trend society living longer is in Europe with 35 per cent of the population,
then
 the second was North America (around 17%). And the third high position was Oceania (almost 20%).
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, the figure for the world total, Asia, and Latin America was under 10
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, with a slight difference (3 or 4%). Meanwhile, people of older age who lived in Africa were the least population. in the prediction number of long life expectancy increases dramatically. Europe will remain the highest community (35%).
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, there are some countries that rocket substantially if we compare to 2000. Those are Asia (inclining around 15%), and Latin America (growing about 15 %). Undeniable that Africa is still the least societies that live longer even though its number
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 up to 13 %.
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